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The door slammed shut, grating slightly across the wooden floor. A lock is drawn across spilling a cloud of rust and dirt under the door, difusing into the air it ...

first off im going to give praise where praise is due :) . to me it was a nice poem, that could become great, your writing style and the poem ...

all in all it was a very moving piece, from the very beginning i felt the mood of it, i really understood what you were trying to put across. it ...

i agree with my predecessors, that was a very powerful,very moving piece. i think you really hit home on that one, i am looking forward to reading more of your ...